What do you think of my poem?

I don't write poems often, so if you have any advice on format or whatever, please let me know. Here it is, based on past events:

Anxiety

I wake up enraged,
Gasping for air,
A chill down my spine,
A scream in my ear,

I search so engaged,
For I cannot bare,
The sound that is mine,
The yell that I hear,

I toss empty bottles,
Looking in despair,
For the thing that will rid me,
Rid me of my fear,

I finally find it,
And chug it all down,
The bottle lie empty,
As I hit the ground.

Answer:
i actually really liked this poem...and the way you put it...wasn't wordy...gave a message...let loose of some feeling...i would keep it up if i were you...maybe those demons will dissipate
It's sophomoric.
I like your poem. I'm not adept enough to give you any advise on format, but wouldn't think it needs any changing. Although I'm guessing that you could add a couple of lines about getting up after hitting the ground and writing a poem. If so, what a triumph over anxiety, despair, rage and the "bottle".
But I want to say more than its therapeutic. It is creative.
I like your poem. It's a bit catchy. I could say that your good.
It's nice. I like it! your good!
dam, theyd go well in a song, so raw and lost yet found at the same time, cool
1 star for you

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